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The Ballad of Bonaduke—Episode 29: All Talk by R. T. Slaywood: What a Small World

The Ballad of BonadukeThe Ballad of Bonaduke—
Episode Episode 29: All Talk

by R.T. Slaywood

DETAILS:
Series: The Ballad of Bonaduke, #29
Format: Kindle Vella Story
Read Date: July 20, 2023

Just once I would like to wake up on something warm and soft.

The Story So Far…

A drunken Michael Bonaduke decides to use a grift (with maybe some sort of magic/magic-like “help”) to win on a scratch-off lottery ticket so he has money to buy more to drink. He pulls off whatever he did, gets his money and some booze and stumbles off into the darkness to drink himself into oblivion so he can start again the next day. He’s hit by dark memories (probably what’s driving him to the drinking) of fire, pleading, and screaming. There’s going to be a price to pay for his grift, and he’s trying to be ready.

He’s abducted by some representatives of a mysterious group who subject him to a test—if he passes, everything will be explained to him (and hopefully the reader, too). He passes—and is brought somewhere for answers, or maybe training, or maybe another test. Time will tell (or things are going to get really annoying). Answers aren’t quick to come—but the mysteries and questions keep piling up.

Things get hairy and Bonaduke leaves and finds himself back in the neighborhood he started from. He takes refuge in a homeless encampment shortly before a police raid. He’s apprehended and finds himself an interrogation room and shortly escapes after using his grift (but with results he didn’t quite intend). He finds himself by a group of squatters who seem to have strapped a woman to a chair for reasons that can’t be good. He attempts to rescue her before he even realizes what he’s doing, and seems to have succeeded—well, the two of them got away from the group anyway—breathing but bruised.

What’s All Talk About?

Desperate for something to eat to help him keep going, Bonaduke walks up to a drive-thru restaurant and places an order. Now, unless things are different where Slaywood or Bonaduke reside, he shouldn’t get served there—but he does. Well, almost. The employee at the window is someone the reader and Bonaduke know. So things go downhill fast (that conjunction might not be the best to use, but who do we know that Bonaduke does where things would go well after running into them?).

Without intending to, Bonduke uses his grift. He and the (still) unconscious woman find themselves a place to wait in relative security while waiting for the next shoe to drop and/or he decides what his next move will be.

So, what did I think about All Talk?

It’s not all talk—but it largely was. It’s one of the more dialogue-heavy episodes thus far—maybe the heaviest. But Slaywood’s kept the forward momentum going—and that’s what’s important.

I can think of nothing I didn’t like about this episode, Bonaduke keeps trying to help this woman, and while not enjoying it, successfully pushes this kid around to do just that. And maybe because he enjoys it a bit.

I really don’t have anything else to say. Good job, and I’m eager to see what happens next.


4 Stars

The Ballad of Bonaduke—Episode 28: The Warning by R. T. Slaywood: In Which Our Hero(?) Ponders a Bit

The Ballad of BonadukeThe Ballad of Bonaduke—
Episode Episode 28: The Warning

by R.T. Slaywood

DETAILS:
Series: The Ballad of Bonaduke, #28
Format: Kindle Vella Story
Read Date: June 29, 2023

I could feel blood dripping down my back and begin soaking the waistline of my pants by the time I reached the exit. The pain from my leg almost blocked out the sensation of my socks soaking from the ankle down, but it was there.

The Story So Far…

A drunken Michael Bonaduke decides to use a grift (with maybe some sort of magic/magic-like “help”) to win on a scratch-off lottery ticket so he has money to buy more to drink. He pulls off whatever he did, gets his money and some booze and stumbles off into the darkness to drink himself into oblivion so he can start again the next day. He’s hit by dark memories (probably what’s driving him to the drinking) of fire, pleading, and screaming. There’s going to be a price to pay for his grift, and he’s trying to be ready.

He’s abducted by some representatives of a mysterious group who subject him to a test—if he passes, everything will be explained to him (and hopefully the reader, too). He passes—and is brought somewhere for answers, or maybe training, or maybe another test. Time will tell (or things are going to get really annoying). Answers aren’t quick to come—but the mysteries and questions keep piling up.

Things get hairy and Bonaduke leaves and finds himself back in the neighborhood he started from. He takes refuge in a homeless encampment shortly before a police raid. He’s apprehended and finds himself an interrogation room and shortly escapes after using his grift (but with results he didn’t quite intend). He finds himself by a group of squatters who seem to have strapped a woman to a chair for reasons that can’t be good. He attempts to rescue her before he even realizes what he’s doing, and…

What’s The Warning About?

This episode is essentially Bonaduke carrying the woman he rescued out of the building and thinking about what happened at the end–how did his grift work in that situation? It was a lot more powerful than he’s used to–for that matter how does it work in the first place? He’s still trying to figure that out.

He doesn’t come up with a firm answer–not much of any answer, but he’s chewing on it.

So, what did I think about The Warning?

So, um…yeah. It’s good for Bonaduke (and therefore the reader) to get some clarification on what happened, but I’m not sure we got any solid answers here. I’m pretty sure he didn’t, and if he didn’t, we can’t. I’d like an answer or two soon. The beginnings of theories are interesting, and it’s nice to see a character think through something. But argh…some progress we could hang our hats on to would be interesting.

I’m reminding myself that if I wasn’t reading this episodically, I’d probably not have these frustrations. But…I am and I do.

I don’t have a firm opinion on this episode, because it’s a stepping stone. The problems I have with it are because of the design, not the execution. I didn’t dislike it is the best I can do–oh, and I want more.

I’m hoping we get back to the guys in the apartment (or their colleagues) in the near future–and maybe some more with the sister-in-law. But if Slaywood’s got another interesting curveball to throw at us, I won’t complain.


3 Stars

The Ballad of Bonaduke—Episode 27: Zero Rescue by R. T. Slaywood: So, That Happened

The Ballad of BonadukeThe Ballad of Bonaduke—
Episode 27: Zero Rescue

by R.T. Slaywood

DETAILS:
Series: The Ballad of Bonaduke, #27
Format: Kindle Vella Story
Read Date: June 29, 2023

This is bad

This is really bad

I’m losing.

The Story So Far…

A drunken Michael Bonaduke decides to use a grift (with maybe some sort of magic/magic-like “help”) to win on a scratch-off lottery ticket so he has money to buy more to drink. He pulls off whatever he did, gets his money and some booze and stumbles off into the darkness to drink himself into oblivion so he can start again the next day. He’s hit by dark memories (probably what’s driving him to the drinking) of fire, pleading, and screaming. There’s going to be a price to pay for his grift, and he’s trying to be ready.

Before then, he gets himself drunk and we get some of his tragic backstory. As he ponders this, he decides to use some of his ill-gotten-gains to buy more booze and walks into a liquor store robbery. He foils it in some sort of magical fashion, gets some more to drink, and heads off to the park to drink until he’s arrested (probably for the failed robbery). At least that’s his plan, but it gets interrupted by being hit by a car. He wakes up on some sort of short, metal bed and is unsure what’s going on. It turns out that some group is subjecting him to a test—if he passes, everything will be explained to him (and hopefully the reader, too). He passes—and is brought somewhere for answers, or maybe training, or maybe another test. Time will tell (or things are going to get really annoying). Answers aren’t quick to come—but the mysteries and questions keep piling up.

Things get hairy and Bonaduke leaves and finds himself back in the neighborhood he started from. Taking refuge in a homeless encampment, Bonaduke has to make some decisions. He starts to get his thoughts in order when the police begin a raid at the camp. During the raid, he’s apprehended by…well, we need to find out. But first, the interrogation kicks off—Bonaduke tries to work his grift to get him out, and while that effort starts off promisingly…it didn’t quite go the way he’d intended. He finds himself by a group of squatters who seem to have strapped a woman to a chair for reasons that can’t be good. He attempts to rescue her before he even realizes what he’s doing, and…

[I really need to tighten that up, hopefully I have time for that next week]

What’s Zero Rescue About?

That title doesn’t fill you with a bunch of hope for what’s about to happen, does it?

We left Bonaduke in a pretty precarious situation. And it gets worse this episode starts.

And then…well, I’m not precisely sure what happens (yet?), but it’s big.

I know I’m being vague, but it’ll be an episode or two before we get a real idea what happened.

So, what did I think about Zero Rescue?

I hate to complain about typos (really)–but there’s one in the final line that took away some of the impact, which is a crying shame, because it was a good one.

I think I liked the episode, but I’m a little afraid that Slaywood might be getting vague and indefinite (maybe even muddled) rather than mysterious and enigmatic. But in time, I trust we’ll get some resolution.

I don’t really have much to say about this episode–I like the directionit’ headed, but I’m going to need to see more before I have much more to say.


3 Stars

The Ballad of Bonaduke—Episode 26: Something Awful by R. T. Slaywood: Whoa…

The Ballad of BonadukeThe Ballad of Bonaduke—
Episode 26: Something Awful

by R.T. Slaywood

DETAILS:
Series: The Ballad of Bonaduke, #26
Format: Kindle Vella Story
Read Date: June 23, 2023

My boot connected with his face. I felt a squishing sensation through the heel of my foot and watched as his entire head collapsed inward like an oversized cadbury egg.

The Story So Far…

A drunken Michael Bonaduke decides to use a grift (with maybe some sort of magic/magic-like “help”) to win on a scratch-off lottery ticket so he has money to buy more to drink. He pulls off whatever he did, gets his money and some booze and stumbles off into the darkness to drink himself into oblivion so he can start again the next day. He’s hit by dark memories (probably what’s driving him to the drinking) of fire, pleading, and screaming. There’s going to be a price to pay for his grift, and he’s trying to be ready.

Before then, he gets himself drunk and we get some of his tragic backstory. As he ponders this, he decides to use some of his ill-gotten-gains to buy more booze and walks into a liquor store robbery. He foils it in some sort of magical fashion, gets some more to drink, and heads off to the park to drink until he’s arrested (probably for the failed robbery). At least that’s his plan, but it gets interrupted by being hit by a car. He wakes up on some sort of short, metal bed and is unsure what’s going on. It turns out that some group is subjecting him to a test—if he passes, everything will be explained to him (and hopefully the reader, too). He passes—and is brought somewhere for answers, or maybe training, or maybe another test. Time will tell (or things are going to get really annoying). Answers aren’t quick to come—but the mysteries and questions keep piling up.

Things get hairy and Bonaduke leaves and finds himself back in the neighborhood he started from. Taking refuge in a homeless encampment, Bonaduke has to make some decisions. He starts to get his thoughts in order when the police begin a raid at the camp. During the raid, he’s apprehended by…well, we need to find out. But first, the interrogation kicks off—Bonaduke tries to work his grift to get him out, and while that effort starts off promisingly…it didn’t quite go the way he’d intended. He finds himself by a group of squatters who seem to have strapped a woman to a chair for reasons that can’t be good. He attempts to rescue her before he even realizes what he’s doing, and…

What’s Something Awful About?

We left Bonaduke in a tight spot—surrounded by a lot of people being led by someone with some sort of interest in their abductee. We don’t know what that interest is, but we know it’s not going to be easy for him to get her out of there.

That’s what this episode’s about—just how hard it’s going to be when all of these people decide to stop Bonaduke. There’s no magic, there’s no grift, there’s no navel-gazing, or anything. It’s just an all-on-one brawl. Bonaduke’s better at that than I’d have guessed—it might just be a combination of fear, adrenaline, and oddly good luck. But it might be working for him.

So, what did I think about Something Awful?

This was nothing but action. The plot didn’t move forward at all, like with many other episodes, but this was so action-packed, who could notice?

There were a couple of lines where I wasn’t sure exactly what Slaywood was trying to accomplish, but by and large, he did a convincing job with this brawl. I was glued throughout and can’t wait to see how/if Bonaduke gets out of this one.


3.5 Stars

The Ballad of Bonaduke—Episode 25: Nothing by R. T. Slaywood: This Ain’t Nothing

The Ballad of BonadukeThe Ballad of Bonaduke—
Episode 25: Nothing

by R.T. Slaywood

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Series: The Ballad of Bonaduke, #25
Format: Kindle Vella Story
Read Date: June 15, 2023

My grift had brought me here. Call it luck, call it destiny, hell call it bad stuff I was done running away. Done hiding. Done. I clenched my jaw and pulled open the disabled sliding door that I somehow knew would be unlocked.

The Story So Far…

A drunken Michael Bonaduke decides to use a grift (with maybe some sort of magic/magic-like “help”) to win on a scratch-off lottery ticket so he has money to buy more to drink. He pulls off whatever he did, gets his money and some booze and stumbles off into the darkness to drink himself into oblivion so he can start again the next day. He’s hit by dark memories (probably what’s driving him to the drinking) of fire, pleading, and screaming. There’s going to be a price to pay for his grift, and he’s trying to be ready.

Before then, he gets himself drunk and we get some of his tragic backstory. As he ponders this, he decides to use some of his ill-gotten-gains to buy more booze and walks into a liquor store robbery. He foils it in some sort of magical fashion, gets some more to drink, and heads off to the park to drink until he’s arrested (probably for the failed robbery). At least that’s his plan, but it gets interrupted by being hit by a car. He wakes up on some sort of short, metal bed and is unsure what’s going on. It turns out that some group is subjecting him to a test—if he passes, everything will be explained to him (and hopefully the reader, too). He passes—and is brought somewhere for answers, or maybe training, or maybe another test. Time will tell (or things are going to get really annoying). Answers aren’t quick to come—but the mysteries and questions keep piling up.

Things get hairy and Bonaduke leaves and finds himself back in the neighborhood he started from. Taking refuge in a homeless encampment, Bonaduke has to make some decisions. He starts to get his thoughts in order when the police begin a raid at the camp. During the raid, he’s apprehended by…well, we need to find out. But first, the interrogation kicks off—Bonaduke tries to work his grift to get him out, and while that effort starts off promisingly…it didn’t quite go the way he’d intended. He finds himself by a group of squatters who seem to have strapped a woman to a chair for reasons that can’t be good.

What’s Nothing About?

Before he can register what he’s doing, Bonaduke races to the woman to try to free her. There’s some commotion from the rest of the squatters and one—presumably a leader of some sort—moves to intervene.

A physical altercation ensues and Bonaduke finds a way to use his grift to help himself and…

I don’t know, we’ll see how badly this goes for him* in the next episode.

* Or how well, I should say—he’s due, right?

So, what did I think about Nothing?

Oh ho! This was good—plenty of action, a little exploration of Bonaduke’s abilities, and the kind of cliffhanger ending that leaves you in anticipation (rather than an eye-roll because it’s clearly manipulative (although the point of a cliffhanger is to manipulate, you know what I mean)).

Bonus points for the rather realistic self-injury resulting from a thrown punch.

No complaints from me on this one. I’m eager for the next episode.


3.5 Stars

The Ballad of Bonaduke—Episode 24: Circles without Center by R. T. Slaywood: That’s Not What I Expected At All

The Ballad of BonadukeThe Ballad of Bonaduke—
Episode 24: Circles without Center

by R.T. Slaywood

DETAILS:
Series: The Ballad of Bonaduke, #24
Format: Kindle Vella Story
Read Date: June 8, 2023

My grift had brought me here. Call it luck, call it destiny, hell call it bad stuff I was done running away. Done hiding. Done. I clenched my jaw and pulled open the disabled sliding door that I somehow knew would be unlocked.

The Story So Far…

A drunken Michael Bonaduke decides to use a grift (with maybe some sort of magic/magic-like “help”) to win on a scratch-off lottery ticket so he has money to buy more to drink. He pulls off whatever he did, gets his money and some booze and stumbles off into the darkness to drink himself into oblivion so he can start again the next day. He’s hit by dark memories (probably what’s driving him to the drinking) of fire, pleading, and screaming. There’s going to be a price to pay for his grift, and he’s trying to be ready.

Before then, he gets himself drunk and we get some of his tragic backstory. As he ponders this, he decides to use some of his ill-gotten-gains to buy more booze and walks into a liquor store robbery. He foils it in some sort of magical fashion, gets some more to drink, and heads off to the park to drink until he’s arrested (probably for the failed robbery). At least that’s his plan, but it gets interrupted by being hit by a car. He wakes up on some sort of short, metal bed and is unsure what’s going on. It turns out that some group is subjecting him to a test—if he passes, everything will be explained to him (and hopefully the reader, too). He passes—and is brought somewhere for answers, or maybe training, or maybe another test. Time will tell (or things are going to get really annoying). Answers aren’t quick to come—but the mysteries and questions keep piling up.

Things get hairy and Bonaduke leaves and finds himself back in the neighborhood he started from. Taking refuge in a homeless encampment, Bonaduke has to make some decisions. He starts to get his thoughts in order when the police begin a raid at the camp. During the raid, he’s apprehended by…well, we need to find out. But first, the interrogation kicks off—Bonaduke tries to work his grift to get him out, and while that effort starts off promisingly…it didn’t quite go the way he’d intended.

What’s Circles without Center About?

Not much. Bonaduke starts to wonder what’s going on with his grift, it’s not working like he’s used to–but maybe that’s because he doesn’t understand it.

He then walks into the building his grift brought him to and finds something neither the reader or he expected.

So, what did I think about Circles without Center?

I have no idea…I didn’t dislike it. But I’m not convinced that I have enough to form an opinion on. I need more to go on.

If the goal was to get me to click on the next episode–it worked. The only reason that I didn’t immediately go forward is that I needed to get some sleep. I really want to see what Bonaduke walked into.


3 Stars

The Ballad of Bonaduke—Episode 23: Grift or Die by R. T. Slaywood: Without a Paddle

The Ballad of BonadukeThe Ballad of Bonaduke—
Episode 23: Grift or Die

by R.T. Slaywood

DETAILS:
Series: The Ballad of Bonaduke, #23
Format: Kindle Vella Story
Read Date: May 25, 2023

I was reminded of the one time my father took me to a natural park…We had been walking for nearly 20 minutes in silence before we heard it shuffle through the underbrush ahead. A bear. Larger than life than [sic] and certainly bigger than any TV picture could have prepared me for. There was a switch in my head that knew immediately how dangerous it was.

The Story So Far…

A drunken Michael Bonaduke decides to use a grift (with maybe some sort of magic/magic-like “help”) to win on a scratch-off lottery ticket so he has money to buy more to drink. He pulls off whatever he did, gets his money and some booze and stumbles off into the darkness to drink himself into oblivion so he can start again the next day. He’s hit by dark memories (probably what’s driving him to the drinking) of fire, pleading, and screaming. There’s going to be a price to pay for his grift, and he’s trying to be ready.

Before then, he gets himself drunk and we get some of his tragic backstory. As he ponders this, he decides to use some of his ill-gotten-gains to buy more booze and walks into a liquor store robbery. He foils it in some sort of magical fashion, gets some more to drink, and heads off to the park to drink until he’s arrested (probably for the failed robbery). At least that’s his plan, but it gets interrupted by being hit by a car. He wakes up on some sort of short, metal bed and is unsure what’s going on. It turns out that some group is subjecting him to a test—if he passes, everything will be explained to him (and hopefully the reader, too). He passes—and is brought somewhere for answers, or maybe training, or maybe another test. Time will tell (or things are going to get really annoying). Answers aren’t quick to come—but the mysteries and questions keep piling up.

Things get hairy and Bonaduke leaves and finds himself back in the neighborhood he started from. Taking refuge in a homeless encampment, Bonaduke has to make some decisions. He starts to get his thoughts in order when the police begin a raid at the camp. During the raid, he’s apprehended by…well, we need to find out. But first, the interrogation kicks off—Bonaduke tries to work his grift to get him out, and while that effort starts off promisingly…it didn’t quite go the way he’d intended.

What’s Grift or Die About?

Er. Whoops. Yeah, he’s out of the police station, seeming free and clear. But he doesn’t have any of his possessions. No jacket, no keys, a wet shirt, and…it’s cold and rainy. Also, he has nowhere to go with the police crackdown on places that the homeless usually go to tonight. Nor can he remember where the apartment Alan and Om were in is. He has one idea but who knows if it’ll work.

So, what did I think about Grift or Die?

Okay, not a lot happens in this episode. But it’s the way that things don’t happen that saves it. The next episode is set up well here, and it kept the reader’s attention.

If it’d gone on longer and got to something beyond where it ended, I might have been happier (and have had something to say), but it wasn’t and I don’t.


3 Stars

The Ballad of Bonaduke—Episode 22: Animals Instinct by R. T. Slaywood: A Quick but Satisfying Episode

The Ballad of BonadukeThe Ballad of Bonaduke—
Episode 22: Animals Instinct

by R.T. Slaywood

DETAILS:
Series: The Ballad of Bonaduke, #21
Format: Kindle Vella Story
Read Date: May 18, 2023

I was reminded of the one time my father took me to a natural park…We had been walking for nearly 20 minutes in silence before we heard it shuffle through the underbrush ahead. A bear. Larger than life than [sic] and certainly bigger than any TV picture could have prepared me for. There was a switch in my head that knew immediately how dangerous it was.

The Story So Far…

A drunken Michael Bonaduke decides to use a grift (with maybe some sort of magic/magic-like “help”) to win on a scratch-off lottery ticket so he has money to buy more to drink. He pulls off whatever he did, gets his money and some booze and stumbles off into the darkness to drink himself into oblivion so he can start again the next day. He’s hit by dark memories (probably what’s driving him to the drinking) of fire, pleading, and screaming. There’s going to be a price to pay for his grift, and he’s trying to be ready.

Before then, he gets himself drunk and we get some of his tragic backstory. As he ponders this, he decides to use some of his ill-gotten-gains to buy more booze and walks into a liquor store robbery. He foils it in some sort of magical fashion, gets some more to drink, and heads off to the park to drink until he’s arrested (probably for the failed robbery). At least that’s his plan, but it gets interrupted by being hit by a car. He wakes up on some sort of short, metal bed and is unsure what’s going on. It turns out that some group is subjecting him to a test—if he passes, everything will be explained to him (and hopefully the reader, too). He passes—and is brought somewhere for answers, or maybe training, or maybe another test. Time will tell (or things are going to get really annoying). Answers aren’t quick to come—but the mysteries and questions keep piling up.

Things get hairy and Bonaduke leaves and finds himself back in the neighborhood he started from. Taking refuge in a homeless encampment, Bonaduke has to make some decisions. He starts to get his thoughts in order when the police begin a raid at the camp. During the raid, he’s apprehended by…well, we need to find out. But first, the interrogation kicks off—Bonaduke tries to work his grift to get him out, and while that effort starts off promisingly…it didn’t quite go the way he’d intended.

What’s Animals Instinct About?

Bonaduke has a quick fantasy about how he can get himself out of the station–and how it would probably go wrong.

Then he gets an unexpected assist (that will likely come with strings attached) and gets out in a very different way.

Well, that’s about it.

So, what did I think about Animals Instinct?

There were a couple of nasty typos that really took me out of the moment, and given the brevity of the episode, that’s not good at all.

This was a quick one and Slaywood acknowledges this in a note, but it does everything an episode needs to. Bonaduke gets out of the police station, we learned a little more about him, and there’s a good character moment. The story moved and it did so well.

And did we learn something about how the grift works? Mayyyybe. Now I’m excited.


3.5 Stars

The Ballad of Bonaduke—Episode 21: Turn Around by R. T. Slaywood: The Aftermath

The Ballad of BonadukeThe Ballad of Bonaduke—
Episode 21: Turn Around

by R.T. Slaywood

DETAILS:
Series: The Ballad of Bonaduke, #21
Format: Kindle Vella Story
Read Date: April 20, 2023

The Story So Far…

A drunken Michael Bonaduke decides to use a grift (with maybe some sort of magic/magic-like “help”) to win on a scratch-off lottery ticket so he has money to buy more to drink. He pulls off whatever he did, gets his money and some booze and stumbles off into the darkness to drink himself into oblivion so he can start again the next day. He’s hit by dark memories (probably what’s driving him to the drinking) of fire, pleading, and screaming. There’s going to be a price to pay for his grift, and he’s trying to be ready.

Before then, he gets himself drunk and we get some of his tragic backstory. As he ponders this, he decides to use some of his ill-gotten-gains to buy more booze and walks into a liquor store robbery. He foils it in some sort of magical fashion, gets some more to drink, and heads off to the park to drink until he’s arrested (probably for the failed robbery). At least that’s his plan, but it gets interrupted by being hit by a car. He wakes up on some sort of short, metal bed and is unsure what’s going on. It turns out that some group is subjecting him to a test—if he passes, everything will be explained to him (and hopefully the reader, too). He passes—and is brought somewhere for answers, or maybe training, or maybe another test. Time will tell (or things are going to get really annoying). Answers aren’t quick to come—but the mysteries and questions keep piling up.

Things get hairy and Bonaduke leaves and finds himself back in the neighborhood he started from. Taking refuge in a homeless encampment, Bonaduke has to make some decisions. He starts to get his thoughts in order when the police begin a raid at the camp. During the raid, he’s apprehended by…well, we need to find out. But first, the interrogation kicks off—Bonaduke tries to work his grift to get him out, and while that effort starts off promisingly…it didn’t quite go the way he’d intended.

What’s Turn Around About?

The effects of his grift were a bit more than Bonaduke was prepared for, but he’s able to push through the carnage and escape from the interrogation room—now he just has to get out of the police station. Which turns out to be more difficult than he’d bargained for.

Trying to move surreptitiously around while looking for an exit, Bonaduke thinks about what he left in that interrogation room and what the ramifications will be for someone other than himself. This bit of reflection leads him to a decision—which we’ll probably get to see in Episode 22.

So, what did I think about Turn Around?

I was both eager and nervous after the last episode. Will we get some more water-treading or will he keep things moving in the same vein? Thankfully, the answer was pretty much the latter.

My initial reaction was that there was something missing from this episode, just a little something that would’ve really helped it come together. But I have no idea what that could be—the more I ponder, the less I can think of that’d be missing. I guess maybe knowing exactly what his plan is at the end would’ve helped, but that’s supposed to propel us into Ep. 22, so I can understand the choice to keep it from us.

Other than that, this really clicked—we get to see his reaction to the events of Room 5 and his scrambling to make the most of it. There’s a lot of tension from the anticipation of action—and Slayton executes it this time in a way that moves things forward, we’re not standing still with indecision here.

A great touch was Bonaduke thinking of others—and not just in a “how can I avoid or get something from them” kind of way. We haven’t really gotten a lot of that kind of thing in the previous 20 episodes, it’s been all about him. Slow character development, but noticeable. That’s always good to see.

I’m really looking forward to the next episode.


3.5 Stars

The Ballad of Bonaduke—Episode 20: Room 5 by R. T. Slaywood: Many, Many Things Happen and My Perseverance is Rewarded

The Ballad of BonadukeThe Ballad of Bonaduke—
Episode 20: Room 5

by R.T. Slaywood

DETAILS:
Series: The Ballad of Bonaduke, #19
Format: Kindle Vella Story
Read Date: March 17, 2023

The Story So Far…

A drunken Michael Bonaduke decides to use a grift (with maybe some sort of magic/magic-like “help”) to win on a scratch-off lottery ticket so he has money to buy more to drink. He pulls off whatever he did, gets his money and some booze and stumbles off into the darkness to drink himself into oblivion so he can start again the next day. He’s hit by dark memories (probably what’s driving him to the drinking) of fire, pleading, and screaming. There’s going to be a price to pay for his grift, and he’s trying to be ready.

Before then, he gets himself drunk and we get some of his tragic backstory. As he ponders this, he decides to use some of his ill-gotten-gains to buy more booze and walks into a liquor store robbery. He foils it in some sort of magical fashion, gets some more to drink, and heads off to the park to drink until he’s arrested (probably for the failed robbery). At least that’s his plan, but it gets interrupted by being hit by a car. He wakes up on some sort of short, metal bed and is unsure what’s going on. It turns out that some group is subjecting him to a test—if he passes, everything will be explained to him (and hopefully the reader, too). He passes—and is brought somewhere for answers, or maybe training, or maybe another test. Time will tell (or things are going to get really annoying). Answers aren’t quick to come—but the mysteries and questions keep piling up.

Things get hairy and Bonaduke leaves and finds himself back in the neighborhood he started from. Taking refuge in a homeless encampment, Bonaduke has to make some decisions. He starts to get his thoughts in order when the police begin a raid at the camp. During the raid, he’s apprehended by…well, we need to find out. But first, the interrogation starts.

What’s Room 5 About?

We pick up in the interrogation room Bonaduke was shoved into last time–with questions about the disaster in his home. Stalling for time–and maybe starting to scheme–Bonaduke asks to borrow some water. This gives him the opportunity to start using his grift to get him out of the building.

But that doesn’t go as well as expected, and some sort of supernatural combat ensues–and we get introduced to a very intriguing mystery that might prove to be the most important part of this story.

So, what did I think about Room 5?

The typos in this one really marred things. If you can’t get your protagonist’s name right (repeatedly)…maybe you need to take more time during the revision stage. There’s a word or two that I’m not sure was correct, either–but I wasn’t sure that something spelled much like them would work in context, either. Also, exactly what was going on with Bonaduke’s “grift” would be better–Slaywood clearly enjoys being coy with this–but it feels more obscure and vague than mysterious. But I can get over that.

Slaywood does some interesting things with whitespace in this one to build suspense. At the end of the day, his typing really made me conflicted.

This episode starts off slow, and I was thinking that even if we don’t get much happening, the interrogation is going to be interesting–and I was okay with that. And then…BOOM! Action flows like crazy. I’m not sure exactly what happened (see my last paragraph), but it kept me gripped. This is one of the longer episodes in the series and by far the best. I can’t wait to see what comes next (it’s been a while since I felt that way).

 


4 Stars

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