The Ballad of Bonaduke—
Episode 20: Room 5
DETAILS: Series: The Ballad of Bonaduke, #19 Format: Kindle Vella Story Read Date: March 17, 2023
The Story So Far…
A drunken Michael Bonaduke decides to use a grift (with maybe some sort of magic/magic-like “help”) to win on a scratch-off lottery ticket so he has money to buy more to drink. He pulls off whatever he did, gets his money and some booze and stumbles off into the darkness to drink himself into oblivion so he can start again the next day. He’s hit by dark memories (probably what’s driving him to the drinking) of fire, pleading, and screaming. There’s going to be a price to pay for his grift, and he’s trying to be ready.
Before then, he gets himself drunk and we get some of his tragic backstory. As he ponders this, he decides to use some of his ill-gotten-gains to buy more booze and walks into a liquor store robbery. He foils it in some sort of magical fashion, gets some more to drink, and heads off to the park to drink until he’s arrested (probably for the failed robbery). At least that’s his plan, but it gets interrupted by being hit by a car. He wakes up on some sort of short, metal bed and is unsure what’s going on. It turns out that some group is subjecting him to a test—if he passes, everything will be explained to him (and hopefully the reader, too). He passes—and is brought somewhere for answers, or maybe training, or maybe another test. Time will tell (or things are going to get really annoying). Answers aren’t quick to come—but the mysteries and questions keep piling up.
Things get hairy and Bonaduke leaves and finds himself back in the neighborhood he started from. Taking refuge in a homeless encampment, Bonaduke has to make some decisions. He starts to get his thoughts in order when the police begin a raid at the camp. During the raid, he’s apprehended by…well, we need to find out. But first, the interrogation starts.
What’s Room 5 About?
We pick up in the interrogation room Bonaduke was shoved into last time–with questions about the disaster in his home. Stalling for time–and maybe starting to scheme–Bonaduke asks to borrow some water. This gives him the opportunity to start using his grift to get him out of the building.
But that doesn’t go as well as expected, and some sort of supernatural combat ensues–and we get introduced to a very intriguing mystery that might prove to be the most important part of this story.
So, what did I think about Room 5?
The typos in this one really marred things. If you can’t get your protagonist’s name right (repeatedly)…maybe you need to take more time during the revision stage. There’s a word or two that I’m not sure was correct, either–but I wasn’t sure that something spelled much like them would work in context, either. Also, exactly what was going on with Bonaduke’s “grift” would be better–Slaywood clearly enjoys being coy with this–but it feels more obscure and vague than mysterious. But I can get over that.
Slaywood does some interesting things with whitespace in this one to build suspense. At the end of the day, his typing really made me conflicted.
This episode starts off slow, and I was thinking that even if we don’t get much happening, the interrogation is going to be interesting–and I was okay with that. And then…BOOM! Action flows like crazy. I’m not sure exactly what happened (see my last paragraph), but it kept me gripped. This is one of the longer episodes in the series and by far the best. I can’t wait to see what comes next (it’s been a while since I felt that way).
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